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tele belly registered: 7/22/2004 00:00 posts: 82	huh? Have you ever written a song before? If so and you'd like to share it with others please do so here. Maybe if others post some I'll post the lyrics to my song. Tabs would be cool too, for ur song. Post away.
posted: 8/9/2004 19:35	Reply | PM | Edit | IP

MalcolmRocks registered: 6/26/2004 00:00 posts: 193	i would but i dont know how to post tabs. =( bummer
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tele belly registered: 7/22/2004 00:00 posts: 83	huh? what? How dont u know how?
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Stupid piece of crap registered: 7/19/2004 00:00 posts: 369

Here is my song that I have been working on forever so tell me if you like it The Golden Whisper In the night when the stars are bright I crawl beneath my pillow tight And think about what might have come to steal the sun and bring the night the monster that fights with the demoned light to kill the people that fight the night and try to bring the night (chorus) Night Night Night Light Light Light Bright light Late night when the killer comes to hack a doo at the people who coo at the bright night there will be sadness in the night so run run run to the sun culdle with the night and not with the bright (chorus) the end I think I still have to work on the ending

posted: 8/9/2004 21:41

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kimbobway registered: 7/16/2004 00:00 posts: 37	well... since you say 'night' 15 times during the song, including the chorus when it repeats. it sucks. plus most of your sentences end with 'ght' which will get on anyones nerves after awhile. its not to bad for a first attempt which it what i am assuming it is... sorry about the brutal honesty but thats how it goes.
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kimbobway registered: 7/16/2004 00:00 posts: 38	.... mmhmm
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Stupid piece of crap registered: 7/19/2004 00:00 posts: 375	fine it didn't take me forever it took me less than three minutes. but the the beginning is pretty good. considering i did it quickly.
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kimbobway registered: 7/16/2004 00:00 posts: 39	soo do you just have words or do you have any notes and crap, because good guitar or something can make up for crapolicious lyrics.
posted: 8/9/2004 22:39	Reply | PM | Edit | IP

Stupid piece of crap registered: 7/19/2004 00:00 posts: 381	Aww i wrote it in a minute so I didn't record it it was a JOKE get it a JOKE the Hives forum can't take a joke can they
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kimbobway registered: 7/16/2004 00:00 posts: 40	hmm i guess not. or maybe we aren't used to people with a brain in their arse. either way i guess all of us have to change and you can stay the same buddy ol' pal!
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Stupid piece of crap registered: 7/19/2004 00:00 posts: 383	What the Fu.ck I couldn't hear you my brain is in my arse
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thebeerbelly registered: 8/10/2004 00:00 posts: 3

that golden.... its nice name, and good context, but a bit farflung from the punk rock empire, anyway instead of butchering someones fine lyrics ill put mine on the slab for inspection. Coastline ----------- I rise against the falling tide, the white spray waves i stand beside, crashing in upon the coast. Blowing hair in salt sea breeze, the coastol fog shadowes the trees, in this place i hide the most. This Coastline is the end, The place where the land meets the sea, the rise and fall, obscures it all where the chance to dive is free. i denounce as sunlight flees, the salt sweet air engulfs the breeze, and now i rest while im left be. And in this place i bathe my eyes, in the light reflected by the tide, so im finally left to be. This Coastline is the end, The place where the land meets the sea, the rise and fall, obscures it all where the chance to dive is free. And in this place i bathe my eyes, in the light reflected by the tide, so im finally left to be. ----------- Mark Bell 9th August 2004, Copyright there dig at that

posted: 8/10/2004 12:15

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thebeerbelly registered: 8/10/2004 00:00 posts: 4

and this........ and this..... ------------------------ You should have been an angel, it would've suited you My gold-leafed triptych angel, she knows just what to do In the half light of morning, in a world between the sheets I swear I saw her angel wing, my vision was complete And I know I'll never want another lover, my sweet Can there be more in this world than the joy of just watching you sleep? I don't know just what to feel Won't someone tell me my love's real? Are we etched in stone or just scratched in the sand Waiting for the waves to come and reclaim the land? Will the sun shine all sweetness and light Burn us to a cinder, our third stone satellite? I'm on a tightrope, baby, nine miles high Striding through the clouds, on my ribbon in the sky I'm on a tightrope, one thing I've found I don't know how to stop, and it's a long, long, long, long way down She's all that ever mattered, and all that ever will My cup, it runneth over, I'll never get my fill The boats in the harbour, slip from their chains Head for new horizons, let's do the same I'm on a tightrope, baby, nine miles high Striding through the clouds, on my ribbon in the sky I'm on a tightrope, one thing I've found I don't know how to stop, and it's a tightrope baby nine miles high Striding through the clouds, on my ribbon in the sky I'm on a tightrope, one thing I've found I don't know how to stop, and it's a long, long, long, long way down

posted: 8/10/2004 12:17

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American Meg registered: 7/17/2004 00:00 posts: 140

Those are beautiful . . . This is the first song I ever wrote. It's about my best friend who died when I was in 7th grade. I would put up the chords but the strumming is really intricate and differents so it wouldn't really help. My Angel __________ You, you are the wind beneath my wings You always help me through all things You keep me from the face of evil You are the one who holds me dear You always know where I am near You keep me safe from my fear You are my angel You are my hero [musical interlude] You are my angel You are my hero 2x fade out in ending. I have another one that I recently wrote. It's really religious so I won't post it.

posted: 8/10/2004 12:24

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tele belly registered: 7/22/2004 00:00 posts: 98	Geesh Man, those make mine sound so hollow. They're good.
posted: 8/10/2004 12:28	Reply | PM | Edit | IP

ElectricNats registered: 3/25/2004 00:00 posts: 989

Hmm I would put up my lyrics to Bittersweet, but it needs some fine tuning. But here are some I did, just randomly, because I was depressed. Humour me, it happens a lot. I get bitter, and this is the result of it. -------------------------------------------- Falling through the veil Falling through the veil, Eyes tight shut, I see your face Watching me. Though the rain may fall, Washing away my tears, My spirit soars, Free like the birds in the sky. Falling through the veil, Silent screams, Resounding off nothing, Yet I hear them so clear… Though the rain may fall, Washing away my tears, My spirit soars, Free like the birds in the sky. Falling through the veil, Secret songs, Echoing in the darkness, Haunting and beautiful. Though the rain may fall, Washing away my tears, My spirit soars, Free like the birds in the sky. Fallen through the veil, A lost soul in a sea of grief, I have left you, And you can’t bring me back. ----------------------------------------- There are a couple of lines which don't make sense, I know, but yeah. Maybe I'll rectify them at some point, who knows?

posted: 8/10/2004 12:53

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thebeerbelly registered: 8/10/2004 00:00 posts: 10	nice nice, tis very flowing and systamatic. try a rhetoical question, it makes the listener feel connected and personal to the song
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Sarah Of Denmark registered: 8/3/2004 00:00 posts: 28	... those lyrics are pretty good....
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tele belly registered: 7/22/2004 00:00 posts: 101	Nice yea...unlike mine.
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ElectricNats registered: 3/25/2004 00:00 posts: 992	Thanks Thanks you guys. :D Tis appreciated greatly. Yeah, the rhetorical question thing is a good idea actually. :) I may add that in sometime. :)
posted: 8/10/2004 13:05	Reply | PM | Edit | IP

Pee Wee the magic hamster registered: 8/4/2004 00:00 posts: 7

My own song Here's one of mine. I'd tell you the chords, but who knows, someone might steal my idea *looks around suspiciously* Loveless I'm out of love again But I don't feel as sad as I can pretend Don't know why I'm faking this for you Wish that I could make you feel like I do Being torn apart again You're so handsome but I can't pretend Don't you hit your head on the ceiling Incredible height just spreads out the feeling I'm seeing polka dots Smudging ink lost all my blots These are my final shots Can't forget who I've lost And I can't pretend again Someone else ignores me what a shock I can't stand for this again

posted: 8/10/2004 15:33

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tele belly registered: 7/22/2004 00:00 posts: 119	Nice! Thats really good...please post the chords! I wont steal them.
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oliviasays registered: 6/28/2004 00:00 posts: 417	... my song is just repeating "1-2-3-4" over and over... its beautiful
posted: 8/10/2004 21:34	Reply | PM | Edit | IP

Charlat registered: 7/28/2004 00:00 posts: 18	... 2 'kimbobway' cn u wrt a better 1 ??? an hav u heard the tune ?
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Charlat registered: 7/28/2004 00:00 posts: 19	... no i no I cnt tak a joke cus im really slow is ur arse nice an cosy ?
posted: 8/11/2004 07:46	Reply | PM | Edit | IP

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